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if we grow old
there will be a sigh
an attention to the change
as your muscles slacken underneath
your faded, favorite shirt
the one that's threadbare, "holy"
in a sense less than divine
I'll have washed it for
the thousandth time
our eyes will crinkle, wrinkle
in ways that start to match
and we'll hold hands and ask:
when did the nerves and veins
begin to let our hands get cold?
-if we grow old
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The Best is Yet to Come by ~Helldalgo has a faint sense of rhyme and an illusory sense of passion. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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BlakeCurran Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Writer
Beautiful, in a tragic kind of way, but very stirring. And congrats on the DD!!
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Helldalgo Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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BlakeCurran Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Writer
No worries :D
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Writer
as your muscles slacken underneath
your faded, favorite shirt
the one that's threadbare, "holy"
in a sense less than divine
I'll have washed it for
the thousandth time


is bloody brilliant. That wordplay is delicious. The entire poem is so melancholy yet there's something inside it that brings a little warmth. I hope that made sense. Congrats on your DD!
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Helldalgo Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Made perfect sense. Thank you. :)
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013   Writer
I'm glad it did. You're very welcome. :)
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RaptorDragoness Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
wow this is really great :)
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LadySuzaku Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
I keep thinking of the line 'Grow old along with me' from Robert Browning's poem as I read this. It's simply introspective on, what is the surface seemingly mundane, but holds more poignant meaning for the person in the lines.

Beautifully done.
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Helldalgo Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was the inspiration for the title. I'm glad you caught the reference. :) Thank you.
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